The Advantages of Online Payment

The Advantages of Online Payment

It is well known that the online payment is very important in our lives,some people very like online payment,but while others don’t like.From my point of view,I always think that the online payment is very popular and trendy,the following are the  benefits.

There are a great number of benefits of online payment; on the one hand, online payment can save a lot of trouble, on the other hand, online payment is very convenient, if I use online payment , I am free to do many other thing at the same time. Last but not least, online payment can teach me many new knowledge and promote learning

In a word, I think that online payment is very important for me ,I life can’t without it

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这篇作文基本完成了试题规定的任务，但存在一些语言错误，且某些部分表达不够清晰。以下是存在的语法错误和修改建议：

1. **句子结构**: "some people very like online payment,but while others don’t like."
   - 修改为: "some people really like online payment, while others don’t."

2. **标点符号**: "From my point of view,I always think that the online payment is very popular and trendy,the following are the benefits."
   - 修改为: "From my point of view, I always think that online payment is very popular and trendy. The following are the benefits."

3. **词汇选择**: "a great number of benefits"
   - 更好的表达可以是: "numerous benefits"

4. **冗余**: "online payment can save a lot of trouble, on the other hand, online payment is very convenient"
   - 可以简化为: "online payment is both trouble-saving and convenient,"

5. **语法错误**: "I am free to do many other thing at the same time"
   - 修改为: "I am free to do many other things at the same time."

6. **词汇选择和搭配**: "online payment can teach me many new knowledge and promote learning"
   - 修改为: "online payment can expose me to new knowledge and promote learning."

7. **拼写和标点**: "I life can’t without it"
   - 修改为: "my life can't be without it."

修改后的版本：

The Advantages of Online Payment

It is well known that online payment is very important in our lives. Some people really like online payment, while others don’t. From my point of view, I always think that online payment is very popular and trendy. The following are the benefits.

There are numerous benefits of online payment. On one hand, online payment is both trouble-saving and convenient. If I use online payment, I am free to do many other things at the same time. Last but not least, online payment can expose me to new knowledge and promote learning.

In a word, I think that online payment is very important for me. My life can't be without it.