Uncivilized Behaviors In Society

Uncivilized Behaviors In Society

Nowadays,uncivilized behaviors in society has become a serious problem that arouses the concern of the while society.On the one hand,uncivilized behaviors will cause a lot of damage to our body and society.On the one hand,uncivilized behaviors will cause bad influence in our society.

Confronted with uncivilized behaviors,we should take a number of effective measures to solve it.First of all,the government should make some laws to manage uncivilized behaviors.In addition,the government should encourage people to use more good civilized behaviors in society.Last but not least,people should learn more great culture improve ourselves behaviors.

In a word,I believe that only when we work together can we expect to have a better future.

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该作文的总体印象属于第三档（13-18分）。文章完成了主要任务，提到了关键内容要点，语法结构和词汇满足最低要求，但存在一些语言错误。

以下是具体的语法错误和修改建议：

1. **用词重复**：
   - 原文：“On the one hand,uncivilized behaviors will cause a lot of damage to our body and society.On the one hand,uncivilized behaviors will cause bad influence in our society.”
   - 修改建议：第二句中的“On the one hand”应改为“On the other hand”以避免重复。
   - 修改后：“On the one hand, uncivilized behaviors will cause a lot of damage to our body and society. On the other hand, they will have a negative influence on our society.”

2. **动词单复数不一致**：
   - 原文：“uncivilized behaviors in society has become a serious problem”
   - 修改建议：将“has”改为“have”，因为主语是“behaviors”。
   - 修改后：“uncivilized behaviors in society have become a serious problem”

3. **连接词使用不当**：
   - 原文：“we should take a number of effective measures to solve it.First of all,the government”
   - 修改建议：在“solve it”后加上空格，并且在“First of all”前增加逗号。
   - 修改后：“we should take a number of effective measures to solve it. First of all, the government”

4. **语句不清**：
   - 原文：“people should learn more great culture improve ourselves behaviors.”
   - 修改建议：重构句子，使其更清晰。
   - 修改后：“people should learn more about great cultures to improve their own behavior.”

5. **标点符号**:
   - 整篇文章中句子之间应有适当的空格，标点符号后应加空格。

修改后的作文如下：

Uncivilized Behaviors In Society

Nowadays, uncivilized behaviors in society have become a serious problem that arouses the concern of the whole society. On the one hand, uncivilized behaviors will cause a lot of damage to our body and society. On the other hand, they will have a negative influence on our society. Confronted with uncivilized behaviors, we should take a number of effective measures to solve it. First of all, the government should make some laws to manage uncivilized behaviors. In addition, the government should encourage people to engage in more civilized behaviors in society. Last but not least, people should learn more about great cultures to improve their own behavior. In a word, I believe that only when we work together can we expect to have a better future.