My Hobbies

                        My hobbies
When it comes to hobby,everyone has his or own idea.Some people suggests that watching TV,while others think that going shopping.From my point of view,my Hobbies have doing exercise、playing games、reading,but i prefer the reading
There are three reasons for my view.On the one hand,reading make me get to know the world and help me with my studies.On the other hand,help me get information and knowledge.Last but not least,it helps me many new things
In a word,my favorite Hobbies is reading.

当然，我很乐意帮您批改这篇作文并指正错误。请您提供完整的作文内容，这样我才能进行评估和批改。

陶果果 发表于 2024-10-20 20:46
当然，我很乐意帮您批改这篇作文并指正错误。请您提供完整的作文内容，这样我才能进行评估和批改。 ...

提供了，麻烦了

莫无言 发表于 2024-10-20 20:46
提供了，麻烦了

看起来您的作文内容没有完全提供。请您重新提交完整的作文内容，以便我进行批改和评分。谢谢！

陶果果 发表于 2024-10-20 20:46
看起来您的作文内容没有完全提供。请您重新提交完整的作文内容，以便我进行批改和评分。谢谢！ ...

提供了，麻烦批改一下

莫无言 发表于 2024-10-20 20:59
提供了，麻烦批改一下

感谢您的耐心等待。以下是针对您提交的作文《My Hobbies》的批改和评分：

### 批改：

1. **标题**：
   - "My hobbies" 应该全部大写为 "My Hobbies"。

2. **第一段**：
   - "When it comes to hobby,everyone has his or own idea.Some people suggests that watching TV,while others think that going shopping.From my point of view,my Hobbies have doing exercise、playing games、reading,but i prefer the reading"

   修改为：
   - "When it comes to hobbies, everyone has his or her own preferences. Some people suggest watching TV, while others think about going shopping. From my point of view, my hobbies include doing exercise, playing games, and reading, but I prefer reading."

   **问题**：
   - "hobby" 应该用复数形式 "hobbies"。
   - "his or own idea" 中缺少 "her"。
   - "suggests" 应为 "suggest"。
   - "while others think that going shopping" 此处不完整，建议使用 "about" 或者直接提出完整内容。
   - "my Hobbies have doing exercise、playing games、reading" 应表达为 "my hobbies include doing exercise, playing games, and reading"。
   - "i" 应大写为 "I"。
   - 标点符号 "," 和 "、" 后应有空格。

3. **第二段**：
   - "There are three reasons for my view.On the one hand,reading make me get to know the world and help me with my studies.On the other hand,help me get information and knowledge.Last but not least,it helps me many new things"

   修改为：
   - "There are three reasons for my preference. On the one hand, reading allows me to know the world better and helps me with my studies. On the other hand, it helps me gain information and knowledge. Last but not least, it introduces me to many new things."

   **问题**：
   - "make me get to know" 改为 "allows me to know" 更自然。
   - "help me with" 改成 "helps me with"。
   - "help me get information and knowledge" 缺少主语 "it"。
   - "helps me many new things" 结构不完整，应为 "introduces me to many new things"。

4. **结尾段**：
   - "In a word,my favorite Hobbies is reading."

   修改为：
   - "In a word, my favorite hobby is reading."

   **问题**：
   - "Hobbies" 应该是单数 "hobby"，因为指的是您最喜欢的一个爱好。

### 评分：

**第二档：19-24分**

- 您基本完成了文章的主要任务并清楚地表达了关键内容要点。虽然文中存在一些语法错误和拼写问题，但整体不影响理解。根据文章的整体结构和语言运用情况，我认为这篇作文属于第二档，得分22分。请继续努力完善语言的准确性与流畅性。