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Dear Tom,
This is Li Ke from Beijing. The reason that l am writing to you is because we will
hold a birthday party for Lucy. Besides of that, here goes another thing that i think
is important, which is that the birthday party will be on Sunday at my home. Lastly,
I believe you should know this at the very end of my letter, and that is you can tell
me if you can come. I appreaciate your time for reading my letter and I am looking
forward to your reply. I hope everything goes well with your life.
Li Ke

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**评语：**
Li Ke的信件基本完成了写作任务，包含了关键内容要点：邀请Tom参加Lucy的生日派对，并说明了时间和地点。然而，也有一些内容可以更加清晰表达。语法结构和词汇满足了最低要求，但存在一些语言错误，影响了文章的流畅性。

**语法错误及修改建议：**

1. **错句:** The reason that l am writing to you is because we will hold a birthday party for Lucy.
   **改正:** The reason I am writing to you is that we will hold a birthday party for Lucy.

2. **错句:** Besides of that, here goes another thing that i think is important, which is that the birthday party will be on Sunday at my home.
   **改正:** Besides that, there is another important thing, which is that the birthday party will be on Sunday at my home.

3. **错句:** Lastly, I believe you should know this at the very end of my letter, and that is you can tell me if you can come.
   **改正:** Lastly, please let me know if you can come.

4. **拼写错误:** I appreaciate your time for reading my letter and I am looking forward to your reply.
   **改正:** I appreciate your time for reading my letter and look forward to your reply.

5. **格式与礼貌用语:** “I hope everything goes well with your life.”
   **改正:** I hope everything is going well with you.

**修改后的作文：**

Dear Tom,

This is Li Ke from Beijing. The reason I am writing to you is that we will hold a birthday party for Lucy. Besides that, there is another important thing, which is that the birthday party will be on Sunday at my home. Lastly, please let me know if you can come. I appreciate your time for reading my letter and look forward to your reply. I hope everything is going well with you.

Li Ke