My Hobby

My Hobby

It is well known that hobby is very important in our lives.The matter of fact,no one can live without hobby.Why I say that?In view of reality,if people have hobby then he will feel blessedness.When he in a bind,hobby can help he get out quickly. As for me,My hobby is reading books.Here are some reasons.

First,read books can teaching me many knowledge and experience.Second,read books can feed my brain and spirit.Third,read books can improve my energy of happiness.So,I very love read books.

As a result,I think reading books is very meanning.

### 批改与评分

根据评分标准和原则，我初步确定该作文属于第三档（13-18分），具体分析如下：

#### 内容要点：
- 提及了阅读书籍的个人爱好，并给出了几点理由。
- 大部分内容要点表达清楚，但有些句子的结构和语法错误较多，影响了理解。

#### 语法错误分析与修改：

1. **"My Hobby It is well known that hobby is very important in our lives."**
   - 错误: 重复主语，缺少连词。
   - 修改: "It is well known that having a hobby is very important in our lives."

2. **"The matter of fact,no one can live without hobby."**
   - 错误: "The matter of fact" 应为 "As a matter of fact"；"hobby" 应为 "a hobby"。
   - 修改: "As a matter of fact, no one can live without a hobby."

3. **"Why I say that?In view of reality,if people have hobby then he will feel blessedness."**
   - 错误: 句式不正确；"he" should be "they" for gender neutrality; "blessedness" 不常用，改为 "happiness" 更为恰当。
   - 修改: "Why do I say that? In reality, if people have a hobby, they will feel happiness."

4. **"When he in a bind,hobby can help he get out quickly."**
   - 错误: 缺少动词 "is"；"he" 应为 "him"。
   - 修改: "When they are in a bind, a hobby can help them get out quickly."

5. **"As for me,My hobby is reading books.Here are some reasons.First,read books can teaching me many knowledge and experience."**
   - 错误: "My hobby" 不应大写；"read books" 应为 "reading books"; "teaching" 应为 "teach"; "many" 应为 "much"。
   - 修改: "As for me, my hobby is reading books. Here are some reasons. First, reading books can teach me much knowledge and experience."

6. **"Second,read books can feed my brain and spirit."**
   - 错误: "read books" 应为 "reading books"。
   - 修改: "Second, reading books can feed my brain and spirit."

7. **"Third,read books can improve my energy of happiness."**
   - 错误: "read books" 应为 "reading books"; "my energy of happiness" 不自然。
   - 修改: "Third, reading books can enhance my sense of happiness."

8. **"So,I very love read books.As a result,I think reading books is very meanning."**
   - 错误: 句式结构错误;"very love" 改为 "love very much"; "read" 应为 "reading"; "meanning" 应为 "meaningful"。
   - 修改: "So, I love reading books very much. As a result, I think reading books is very meaningful."

综上所述，该作文最终的评分为 **16 分**。修改后的版本如下：

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### My Hobby

It is well known that having a hobby is very important in our lives. As a matter of fact, no one can live without a hobby. Why do I say that? In reality, if people have a hobby, they will feel happiness. When they are in a bind, a hobby can help them get out quickly.

As for me, my hobby is reading books. Here are some reasons. First, reading books can teach me much knowledge and experience. Second, reading books can feed my brain and spirit. Third, reading books can enhance my sense of happiness.

So, I love reading books very much. As a result, I think reading books is very meaningful.