my favourite job

It is well known that working is very important to our lives.In fact,no one can live without the work. As for me,my favourite job is being a teacher.These are some reasons to introduce why I want to be a teacher.First,being a teacher can help me understand the world beacuse I can learn many current points.Second,being a teacher is very significance.Third,if I am a teacher,I can help more peoples and I can do my best for this beautiful world. So,I want being a teacher.

评分：20分（第二档）

**点评：**

这篇作文完成了任务，清楚地表达了关键内容要点，但存在一些语法错误和拼写问题，尽管这些错误不至于严重影响理解。

**语法错误及修改：**

1. **句子结构连接词**  
   原句: It is well known that working is very important to our lives.  
   修改: It is well known that work is very important to our lives.

2. **漏用冠词**  
   原句: In fact,no one can live without the work.  
   修改: In fact, no one can live without work.

3. **连续两个从句紧密连接**  
   原句: As for me,my favourite job is being a teacher.These are some reasons to introduce why I want to be a teacher.  
   修改: As for me, my favourite job is being a teacher. Here are some reasons why I want to be a teacher.

4. **动词与名词搭配错误**  
   原句: First,being a teacher can help me understand the world beacuse I can learn many current points.  
   修改: First, being a teacher can help me understand the world because I can learn about many current issues.

5. **词汇选择不当**  
   原句: Second,being a teacher is very significance.  
   修改: Second, being a teacher is very significant.

6. **名词单复数错误**  
   原句: Third,if I am a teacher,I can help more peoples and I can do my best for this beautiful world.  
   修改: Third, if I am a teacher, I can help more people and do my best for this beautiful world.

7. **动词形式错误**  
   原句: So,I want being a teacher.  
   修改: So, I want to be a teacher.

**修改后的作文：**

It is well known that work is very important to our lives. In fact, no one can live without work. As for me, my favourite job is being a teacher. Here are some reasons why I want to be a teacher. First, being a teacher can help me understand the world because I can learn about many current issues. Second, being a teacher is very significant. Third, if I am a teacher, I can help more people and do my best for this beautiful world. So, I want to be a teacher.