英语作文修改

It is well known that the teacher is very importang in our lives. Our teacher can teach us many new things. So my favorite job is being a teacher.
   I want to be a teacher because I think they are very great. If I become a teacher,I will work hard to teach my students, I will work with the children. I love children very much, so I will be happy every day. I will also be able to work outside sometimes.But I will work hard every day ,sometimes I will be tired. I can also get more experience from my job. Besides,Teachers have many holidays and do not have to work overtime.
   Being a teacher has many advantages.My favorite job is teaching.




Please identify and list any mistakes or unclear expressions in this essay written by a/an (目的语言) student.

It is well known that teachers are very important in our lives. They can teach us many new things. Therefore, my favorite job is being a teacher.
I want to be a teacher because I think it is a great profession. If I become a teacher, I will work hard to teach my students and I will enjoy working with children. I love children very much, so every day will be a happy day for me. Additionally, being a teacher allows me to work outside sometimes. However, I understand that being a teacher requires hard work and there will be days when I feel tired. Nevertheless, I believe that I can gain valuable experiences from this job. Furthermore, teachers have many holidays and do not have to work overtime.
Being a teacher has many advantages. Teaching is my favorite job.

陶果果 发表于 2023-10-6 01:21
It is well known that teachers are very important in our lives. They can teach us many new things. T ...

部分句子修改的原因？

admin 发表于 2023-10-06 01:26
部分句子修改的原因？

这些句子需要修改是因为它们在语法和表达上有一些错误或者可以进一步改进。下面是对每个句子进行修改的原因：

1. "Our teacher can teach us many new things." 这个句子没有语法错误，但可以更加具体地描述老师教给我们什么样的新知识。

2. "So my favorite job is being a teacher." 这个句子可以用更好的连接词或短语来引导后续句子，使其更流畅自然。

3. "I think they are very great." 这个句子使用了不准确的代词引用，并且"great"这个形容词也可以换成更具体的形容词。

4. "I will work hard to teach my students, I will work with the children." 这个句子重复了"I will work"这个动词短语，可以用其他方式来表达同样的意思。

5. "But I will work hard every day, sometimes I will be tired." 这个句子中的连接词用得不准确，可以使用更合适的连接词来连接两个句子。

6. "I can also get more experience from my job." 这个句子使用了错误的情态动词形式，应该使用"will"来表达未来可能的结果。

7. "Being a teacher has many advantages." 这个句子本身没有错误，但可以进一步展开说明具体的优势。

总之，修改这些句子可以使其表达更加准确、流畅，并清楚地传达作者的想法。