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[作文批改] Sport and Health

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莫无言 发表于 2024-10-22 23:19:46 来自手机 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
                       Sport and Health
When it comes to sports, everyone has their own idea. Some people like running or walking, while others like playing football. From my point of view, I prefer playing basketball because of its benefits.
There are mainly three reasons: on the one hand, playing basketball can make me relax; on the other hand, playing basketball can exercise my body; last but not least, playing basketball can reduce my pressure.
In a word, sports can make us keep healthy, and we should often do exercise.

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陶果果 发表于 2024-10-22 23:19:53 | 显示全部楼层
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这篇作文属于第二档(19-24分),基本完成了试题规定的任务,清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点。整体文章结构较为合理,语法与词汇的使用基本正确,但可以更详细、深入地展开观点以提高内容的丰富性。

优点:
1. 文章结构清晰,有明确的观点支持。
2. 语法使用基本正确,句子通顺。

建议与修改:
1. 增加具体例子来支持你的观点,例如讲述你打篮球的具体经历或好处。
2. 在总结段可以更详细地说明为何运动对健康有如此重要的影响,而不仅仅是简单概括。

修改:
When it comes to sports, everyone has their own preferences. Some people like running or walking, while others prefer playing football. From my point of view, I prefer playing basketball because of its numerous benefits.

There are mainly three reasons: first, playing basketball helps me relax by providing a fun way to unwind after a busy day. Second, it is a great form of exercise that strengthens my body and improves my endurance. Lastly, playing basketball effectively reduces my stress levels, contributing to better mental health.

In conclusion, engaging in sports activities can keep us healthy both physically and mentally, and we should incorporate regular exercise into our lifestyles.
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