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                                  Fight against Haze
Nowadays, with the development of economy and industry, pollution
becomes a enormous problem of our societies. And haze turned out to be the
top one that we should deal with.
The reason that haze should be controlled is based on several effect of it.
First of all, haze is what we called PM2.5 which could bring into our lungs with
inhalation and caused some lung disease. Also, living in haze weather would
enhance the chance of getting cancer.
Learning about the harmful factors, the easiest way for civilians is wearing
mask to keep it out of our lungs, which is only the surface. Haze is the exhaust
gas from factories and cars. Using public transportation could help to control the


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作文批改:
                                  Fight against Haze
Nowadays, with the development of the economy and industry, pollution has become an enormous problem in our society. Haze, in particular, has become the top issue that we need to address.

There are several reasons why haze needs to be controlled. Firstly, haze consists of PM2.5 particles, which can enter our lungs when inhaled, leading to respiratory diseases. Additionally, living in hazy weather increases the risk of getting cancer.

Having learned about these harmful effects, one easy way for civilians to protect themselves is by wearing masks to prevent the entry of haze into their lungs. However, this is only a superficial solution. Haze is primarily caused by exhaust emissions from factories and vehicles. Therefore, using public transportation could play a significant role in controlling and reducing haze pollution.

评价得分: 7/10
- 语法和拼写方面基本正确，但有些句子结构不够流畅
- 文章内容完整，对雾霾的原因和影响进行了简单介绍
- 建议对文章进行适当的扩展，包括更多具体的解决方案和措施，以及宣传和教育的重要性

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批改后的作文:
                                  打击雾霾
如今，随着经济和工业的发展，污染已经成为我们社会面临的一大问题。尤其是雾霾成为我们需要应对的头号问题。

雾霾需要被控制的原因有几个。首先，雾霾主要由PM2.5颗粒组成，当我们吸入时，它们会进入我们的肺部，导致呼吸系统疾病。此外，居住在雾霾天气中会增加患癌症的风险。

了解了这些有害影响后，市民保护自己的最简单方法是戴口罩，以阻止雾霾进入肺部。然而，这只是表面上的解决办法。雾霾主要是由工厂和车辆的尾气排放引起的。因此，使用公共交通工具可以在控制和减少雾霾污染方面发挥重要作用。

评价得分: 7/10
- Grammar and spelling are generally correct, but some sentence structures are not very fluent.
- The content of the essay is complete, briefly introducing the causes and effects of haze.
- It is suggested to expand the essay by including more specific solutions and actions, as well as emphasizing the importance of awareness and education.